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01."Do you know what we are?"

"We're time tables and crossed fingers and forgotten wonders
of yesterday's dreams.
We're the shadows on concrete made from dandelions sprouting
up from between  the cracks.
And we are stray raindrops on windy,
sun-soaked mornings."

"We are alive."


02. You never screamed so loud, so angry as you did today.
But then you smiled. And I could hear your happiness a mile away.
        
"It's you. It's always you." You were trembling, but you wouldn't let me get too close.

"I'm sorry I made you this way," I whispered, shoving secrets down the neck
of my old guitar.


03. Tiny scars of my pride show like scratches on silver.
           We'll wait for the right moment to leave our mark in the skies.
You will wear blue jeans and I'll wear a smile and together we'll forget about
                                                                   life and then we'll live.
          
"Empty spaces leave more room to grow. Remember that."
                                                  
                       I think you were talking about my heart.
                                                                                Or yours.


04. I wish you would stop writing your story down in song lyrics.
                 It hurts to know that there is music
                       to go along with the heartache.
Yep. Poetry prose again. Yay.

Needs work but meh.

There should be a category for fiction with nonfiction. And there really should be a category for poetry-prose. It's taking over dA literature I swear.

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:iconstarinyourskye:
StarInYourSkye Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2009
Love the 2nd and 4th part.
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2009
:aww:
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Ameko-Shadowsong Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
I also think there needs to be a category of literature just called "emotion," but sometimes "human nature" or "romantic" or "general" just don't cut it.

I am in love with 01. As a general rule, I like 2's, but I'll make an exception for this straight-backed general today, since you have offered him perfection.

(um... yeah. don't ask. >.> )
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Nymphe-AR Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
The first two lines caught my attention & left me breathless D:
*continues reading* xD
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Nymphe-AR Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
"It hurts to know that there is music
to go along with the heartache."
Totally loved it ^_^ It's beautiful as always.
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:iconrainyskyz:
RainySkyz Featured By Owner May 20, 2009   Writer
"04. I wish you would stop writing your story down in song lyrics. It hurts to know that there is music to go along with the heartache."

*smiles* Great words. You are so insightful and gifted in the way you share that talent.
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 24, 2009
Thanks so much :heart:
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katylynn130 Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
Ah, I always love reading your work.
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:iconhush-lullaby:
hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
Awh :hug:
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:icondead-neon-light:
dead-neon-light Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
04 = :heart::heart::heart:
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:iconhush-lullaby:
hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
:hug:
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HelzCullen Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
GOLLY GOSH, KELSEY WITH THE NAME OF THE THIRD GRADE TEACHER'S HUSBAND,

you are intensely awesome :heart:

I don't know how to describe it. Just ahhh. And more aaaaahhhhhhh.
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
GOODNESS GRACIOUS, HELEN WITH THE NAME THAT REMINDS ME OF THE MOVIE 'RAISING HELEN' (which I love, and I love you)

you are extremely wonderful <3

That could be taken many different ways ^^ xD
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HelzCullen Featured By Owner May 14, 2009
Ah, I haven't seen that. BUT I could suggest to watch it with my friends when we go over for a (8-person) sleepover next :3 we've been wondering what to watch. AHA THANK YOU :D

You are too! :]

And :iconroflcopterplz:
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:iconhush-lullaby:
hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 15, 2009
8 person sleepovers. That sound like my group of friends. Except we don't really have sleepovers just parties (:

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HelzCullen Featured By Owner May 16, 2009
We have this tradition that we daren't break xD we can't stop now, just because we're older. Heh :3
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ItsxMagik Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
Wow, seriously... you are like a goddess of writing or something.
This is brilliant :heart:
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
Oh noes. I don't think I can top that with a bigger compliment (what's higher than a goddess? i can't think of anything) for you. But you deserve one though. You're the Queen of Writing (because goddesses are really myths and don't really exist, but queens very much do)

You're amazing. Thank you so much, Sarah :heart:
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ItsxMagik Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
You deserve it!
You're more amazing :3
Thank you, and you're quite welcome :heart:
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DarkDoggy696 Featured By Owner May 11, 2009  Student Writer
I can find word to describe how it's feel inside
just wonderfull
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
awh thanks so much :heart:
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DarkDoggy696 Featured By Owner May 14, 2009  Student Writer
you deserve it
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paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner May 11, 2009   Writer
04. is so brilliant.
and poetic prose is wonderful. I think it might be my favorite type of writing. AND you always do it so magically.
:heart:
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
goodness thank you <3
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kallia-goldenwings Featured By Owner May 11, 2009
That is just so sad. I have to wonder does our heart chance shape every time it broken?
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 18, 2009
Maybe. I guess it depends on how damaged it is.
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Arthisa Featured By Owner May 11, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I don't know what to say. I've skimmed through the reviews that came before and they've said it all. It can be summarized into those three words: You Are Amazing.

Usually I find a favorite quote from your poem to go with the comment, but honestly, there are way too many for me to choose in this one...

[PS: I doubt the category matters at all. I'd just put it in poetry: I feel all beautifully written prose should be called poetry anyway.]
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 17, 2009
:aww: you are far too kind you know that?

thank you so so much. I wish I could say more than that :heart:
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:iconarthisa:
Arthisa Featured By Owner May 17, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you is definitely enough. You deserve it.
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unstellastique Featured By Owner May 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
fucking loved ittt :heart:
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:iconhush-lullaby:
hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
yay! :heart:
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:iconhungry4edward:
hungry4edward Featured By Owner May 10, 2009  Student Photographer
Oh my gosh, you're amazing. Your poetry/prose is beautiful! :heart:
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
gah thanks so much Vanessa! :heart:
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:iconhungry4edward:
hungry4edward Featured By Owner May 14, 2009  Student Photographer
You're very very welcome!
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:icontyveris:
Tyveris Featured By Owner May 10, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I love poetic prose. Its very fun
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
I agree ^^
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notsovulnerable Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
"You will wear blue jeans and I'll wear a smile and together we'll forget about
life and then we'll live."
.

Beautiful.
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
Thanks so much (:
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notsovulnerable Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
You're welcome :)
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kar1sa Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
very well written
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:iconhush-lullaby:
hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
thanks (:
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Lustful-Sin Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
The last line held the most power for me. Really, I think music is the universal language in any situation. I'm glad I read this. And yes, I agree, there should be some kind of catergory for that topic. Nicely written.
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
Thanks a lot (:
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:iconlustful-sin:
Lustful-Sin Featured By Owner May 14, 2009
You're welcome. I 'm sure you get a million and one things to attend to. Thanks for taking the time out to comment me back. :D
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Wanderer11 Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
Bravo! xD
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
:aww:
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RoseShadow975 Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
ohh, you write so beautifully i'm almost tearing up.
wonderful, wonderful. :heart:
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
awh thanks so much. You have no idea how much that means to me :heart:
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SordisPretiosa Featured By Owner May 10, 2009
You shouldn't care too much about the category [although I agree with you - someone should create one for poetry-prose].
But, whatever. Again it's beautifully written.

"You will wear blue jeans and I'll wear a smile and together we'll forget about
life and then we'll live."

That's... I don't know, it's so incredibly tender and... just :heart:.

"Empty spaces leave more room to grow. Remember that."
I think you were talking about my heart.
Or yours.

Gosh - I miss words when I want to describe what I feel while reading your poems. It's sad, of course, but so beautiful-sad~

What shall I say instead of: gorgeous?
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hush-lullaby Featured By Owner May 13, 2009
goodness. I love your comments so so much. They're so thoughtful. Thank you a million times over :heart:
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